2015年1月17日雅思写作范文分析-智课教育出国考试

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2015年1月17日雅思写作范文分析-智课教育出国考试2015年的雅思考试已经拉开帷幕，1月17号雅思考试想必很多烤鸭已经感受过了，但是对于雅思写作范文相信很多人还是很期待一睹真面目的。本文为大家介绍2015年1月17日雅思写作范文分析，供大家参考！

原创范文赏析：

首段：个性开篇 + 作家立场

Have you ever annoyed by unexpected intrusions of noisethat prevents your peaceful trips. Have you exposed to bursts ofnoise when you work on one task. Have you felt tired of livingwith chronic city noise day after day.I believe every inpidualprefer a peaceful and quiet environment to a noisy one.

首段点评：文无定法；个性开篇；惜墨如金。

二段：正方观点论据拓展以及例证和细节：

It is imperative for the government to strictly control theamount of noise in our life. First, a survey can prove my

stand，compared with students who attended schools in quietneighborhoods，the counterparts attended schools near noisyairport are liable to suffer from distraction. Also，the debatereminds me of my experience, as a columnist，I take pleasure increating new essays in a café and I pay high price for a quietenvironment，however，there are，sometimes，two inane

babblers to break the silence，I can hardly zero in on work undernoisy circumstances . Last, when I made a self-travel in England, Ifound that all travelers voluntarily switched phones to silent,

turned stereos off and kept chatter to a minimum. Conversely, inmy city, some people never notice that they become nuisancesby talking aloud, playing cell phone music in public. So, finingpeople for making a din will definitely dissuade the polluter andbe proved to be a neat solution.

二段点评：首句亮明观点政府应该控制噪音；三个细节支持：第一；研究调查显示噪音不同的环境对于学生们的学习带来不同影响。第二，个人经历，谈及噪音对于工作的影响。第三，谈及旅行的经历，对比反证强调政府应该向个人制造噪音的行为收取罚款。

Tip：没有英国旅行的经历(其实我的去的是泰国)，以英国为例，增强考官的国家荣誉感，课取悦考官，对比反证谈及到自己的城市，也是忠实于自己真诚情感的表达。对比之后，自然过渡到政府应该对个人噪音制造者罚款。(即为政府要控制噪音)；当然，文章的例证还可以谈及政治禁止司机在学校周边或者主要街道鸣笛，禁止建筑企业夜间施工等，只要自圆其说，文无定法。

三段：他人口吻谈及反方观点：两个论据的展开：

Others，however，think differently.First, some people arguethat the noise might, at first , be quite

annoying，however，people might do well at their tasks after awhile because humans are capable of adjusting to a manifoldnoise levels. Further, some people may believe that making noiserandomly is a basic right which can never be deprived.

Hence，some people are in the habit of having a noisy party orloudly playing musical instrument at home, or constantly

honking the horn when driving a car. What I am worried about isthat the right of making noise might be abused.

三段点评：他人口吻引导反方观点，再简单反驳反方观点，立场一致。

尾段：总结作家立场：

Apparently，every government should be urged to reduce oreliminate the adverse effects of noise.

原创基础语料库：

1. control over v控制……

2. noise pollution n噪音污染

3. noisy environment n吵闹的环境

4. intrusions of noise n噪音的干扰

5. expose to bursts of noise v接触到噪音

6. make noise randomly v任意制造噪音

7. make a din v 发出喧闹声

8. noise maker n发出噪音者

9. be annoyed by …… v 被 …… 烦扰

10. nuisance n令人讨厌的人或者物

全文总结：全文350字，可在现场完成创作；(推荐字数为320-360)；本文中童鞋可以学习到的是首段自然的个性开篇：三个问句引导噪音污染带来的烦恼，随之自然亮明作家立场。二段先强调主题句，再以三个论据支持作家立场。三段以他人口口吻展开反方观点，再简单反驳反方观点，完成任务指令的同时，保证逻辑清晰。尾段简洁收尾，再次强调作家立场。

童鞋启示：本文模板套语极其简洁，而细节和例证极其饱满。本文中很少出现网络中或出版书籍中常见的冗长的句型，以很朴素的文风遣词造句，以一些亮点词汇为点缀。最重要的是：文章主题明确；逻辑清晰；例证鲜明；词汇精准；符合评分标准。

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